草稿讨论:Joyce Ho

Comments from Group1

1. You can add Wikipedia link. For example, University of California Irvine.
2. The format is not consistent. For example, In early life section, you have used paragraph indentation, but in other sections haven't.
3. The word "rs" in the introduction may be the missing word.
4. It will be better if they put her Chinese name in the introduction section.

Overall, this article has provided enough references and well-cited.

--PennyLin7（留言） 2024年5月22日 (三) 02:06 (UTC)

G2's comments

You used many adjectives in your article, if it is unnecessary, you can avoid using them. And we think overall your references and citations are sufficient to support your description.--Elainehsiehh（留言） 2024年5月22日 (三) 02:17 (UTC)

G3's Comments and Suggestions

here is no Wiki references for each keyword. In the section of Early life and education, there is a quotation error in the third paragraph.--Kmkmkmakam（留言） 2024年5月22日 (三) 02:21 (UTC)

Comments made by Group 5

1. In the introduction part, it seems that "many crucial" is not a neutral point. In addition, I don't know what the "rs" means.
2. The format of the title is not correct. The font should be "Heading".
3. Please check the usage of bold font.

--Yihsuanmily（留言） 2024年5月22日 (三) 02:25 (UTC)

Group 6

very good and also multiple citations to verify points which is even better--BeeJazz01（留言） 2024年5月22日 (三) 03:06 (UTC)